Okay this next poem isn't even poetry. It's a piece of shit. I have no idea what the fuck i was thinking. Again, it has two reviews, not by the same two people though.
The first one is by someone i don't know.
arbysauce93 (2005-01-02): "Very interesting style on the poem. It is definately introspective and original, and though I personally do not agree with it all for me, it is good to see your views. The last two lines were great. Good job. Keep writing!"
The next by Jazzy (2005-01-17): "interesting... quite depressing really. its makes me feel gray inside..."
Modified: Mon 29 Nov 2004 03:49:18 PM EST
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1770804/1/Just_think_about_it (11-29-04)
Just Think About It
Realtity? Bullshit.
dreams? dreams?
Feelings? real.
Love? pain.
friends? hate
Pleasure? torture.
time? none.
place? alone.
unity? independence.
fate? lies.
uniqueness? singular.
belief? one.
heart? dead.
soul? dark.
blood? cold.
life? hell.
good? corruption.
me? nothing.
nothing? truth.
The first one is by someone i don't know.
arbysauce93 (2005-01-02): "Very interesting style on the poem. It is definately introspective and original, and though I personally do not agree with it all for me, it is good to see your views. The last two lines were great. Good job. Keep writing!"
The next by Jazzy (2005-01-17): "interesting... quite depressing really. its makes me feel gray inside..."
Modified: Mon 29 Nov 2004 03:49:18 PM EST
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1770804/1/Just_think_about_it (11-29-04)
Just Think About It
Realtity? Bullshit.
dreams? dreams?
Feelings? real.
Love? pain.
friends? hate
Pleasure? torture.
time? none.
place? alone.
unity? independence.
fate? lies.
uniqueness? singular.
belief? one.
heart? dead.
soul? dark.
blood? cold.
life? hell.
good? corruption.
me? nothing.
nothing? truth.
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