No. 89

Only one review this time and it's by someone i don't know. Man, these reviews are worthless. I'd get compliments from friends because they were my friends and compliments from people i didn't know because they wanted the same thing from me.

Slowly Sinking (2005-06-07): "Very powerful opening, intriguing ending. Good poem."

Modified: Tue 07 Jun 2005 01:13:50 PM EDT
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1933421/1/Lost (06-07-05)

Lost

I don't know who I am anymore I am alone Should I come back to this world and live it as reality or should I stay here and drown. Could I learn to breathe underwater or should I set my feet on the ground Don't help me I'm on my own now I started Innocent, as we all do And I grew to love and to hate as well Then I let go, to set things straight but I lovst my love, along with hate. So now, I am by myself To tell my fate...

This next one i remember i wrote in poetry club. I think we all wrote down a subject (or first word maybe?) and drew them from a hat or something. I got 'pie'. Three reviews. First and last by people i don't know.

Elizabeth Bilberry (2005-06-07): "hmm i find this amusing and thought provocative...

EB"

and if theyy get me (2005-06-07): "ah.. its so good... but it makes me think of larvae, dying children, and rabid mice. but its good. its defintly good."

asanoharu (2005-06-07): "Very yummy. :D

I really like this."

I'm not going to bother fixing anything about this.

Modified: Tue 07 Jun 2005 08:46:38 PM EDT
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/1933804/1/Pie (06-07-05)

Pie
hangs on a thread above the Earth-deep pit
before the eyes of the starving,
chained prisoner.
Confused, they can,
only smell the precious pie.
Remembering the last time they tasted such sweetness and delicacy of the lips of a lost lover.
The Pie,
Their mind,
they lost,
Dangles over the pit.

-Hungry consumers chew on the knife